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jazz by ~fishwife:iconfishwife:

Categories Literature > Poetry > General Poetry > Open


Jazz me.
I wanna be.
Jazz me.

Let those white, white teeth
Shine out like blue-note stars
In the gloom of the smoky
Backstreet bar.

Spill that husky, rusty voice
Over ambience and background
Noise. Scribe those notes over
My late-night skin,
Watch the goose-bumps rise
As you begin to sing.

Don’t take it fast.
Don’t want it slow.
I want it sweet.
So jazz me.

Transport me to your
Saxaphone dream, take my
Hand with your soul-sound band
and tell mr bass it ain’t no race,
It’s just jazz.
So make it smooth.

Take your trumpet fantasy and
relay all your thoughts to me
through improvised sighs and
Mr Jive Eyes.

Jazz me,
Just jazz me.
©2003-2009 ~fishwife
:iconfishwife:

Author's Comments

Okay, sorry about the problems. Think I've fixed it now. Again...wrote this at a rainy bus stop today. I'm wet. This isn't great.

Linds.

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:iconchilipalmer:
`chilipalmer Mar 11, 2003, 9:44:26 AM
Not sure what to say...

Jazz is a wonderful type of music to get lost within...

"Take your trumpet fantasy and
relay all your thoughts to me
through improvised sighs and
Mr Jive Eyes."

I like it :P (Lick)

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<insert signature here>
:iconplagiarist:
~plagiarist Mar 11, 2003, 10:35:12 AM
Sensual. Hm, interesting that I've never really looked into jazz-bar talk, the dry humour and aesthetic inflection suit me very much.
:iconcaptainmania:
~captainmania Mar 11, 2003, 1:20:39 PM
me loves this... it just flows well & sounds like upbeat music...
smiley & fun poetry, methinks..
:iconscrewball:
~screwball Mar 11, 2003, 8:26:42 PM
Fine piece of writing. Not much more I can say about it.

--
No quid pro quo. Read my work if you wish. Don't comment on it because I read and commented on yours. I read for my pleasure and comment for free. ....
A man can draw horselaughs from the Gods without getting even a suppressed smile from other humans.
:iconsrlunsford:
~srlunsford Mar 11, 2003, 8:33:57 PM
I don't know...I think this is rather good work. It's very interesting...and it can be read on so many levels. I like it. =) (Smile)
:iconvalar:
~valar Mar 12, 2003, 11:56:25 AM
I like the images here....it's like sitting in that bar watching the notes float in the air - fantastic.
One small thing which niggled me was the line "So Jazz me" halfway through. I don't think it fits there?

Just my opinion....

I can see the notes now....floating through the smoke.

Luv ya lots.

Valar.

--
They All Sleep. We Just Dream.
:icondark-angel:
~dark-angel Mar 13, 2003, 12:45:34 AM
Great imagery again. Very well written.

"and tell mr bass it ain’t no race,
It’s just jazz.
So make it smooth."

I thought those lines were particularly well written.

Good poem :) (Smile)
:iconirwin:
~irwin Mar 15, 2003, 8:15:04 PM
That was beautiful Ms. Fish. I felt like reading for some reason, and this title caught my eye. The poem's tone flows so nicely, and for some reason, it made me smile while I was reading it. You are a true talent Ms. Fish. :) (Smile)
:iconinanexenophon:
~inanexenophon Mar 16, 2003, 5:23:28 PM
Call me biased, but that hit the right note (har, har) with me. Love it. From the first stanza I could hear this poem in my head as a song.

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:sing: The Spastic Asthmatic
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